#1
by the way this is not a slow song. on verse 3 it is screamo.

(verse 1 )
a bag full of regrets cover the world like a sheild
bad memories trying to escape
we need a doctor above to help us be healed
all the problem that we make.

(bridge)
oh....... why the world turn against us
to bring out the devil in us
there`s nothing we can do
we`ll just have to fight it off

(chorus)
our bodies burn
as sins surround us
and we cant help it
we cant help it
our spirits burn
as sins reveal us
we cant stop it
we cant stop it

(verse2)
we need a saviour to stop the bad in our minds
before the world messes up
we need the a hero to prevent the bad times
so the evil is forgotten

(bridge)

(chorus)x2

(verse3)x4
our bodies burn
our spirits burn
and we cant help it
we cant help it

(bridge)

(chorus)x3.
#2
Quote by lildudenikki

we need a saviour to stop the bad in our minds
before the world messes up
we need the a hero to prevent the bad times
so the evil is forgotten


I think this area needs the most work. The word "bad" is kind of a weak descriptor.
Something like, just as an example:

"We need a saviour to stem the tide of our sins
before the worlds collide
we need a hero to heal our minds
and cleanse the evils inside"

might flow better. Take my words for what you will because I'm rather new at the writing process. Just a suggestion. Goodluck Gent!


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#3
Quote by merriman44
I think this area needs the most work. The word "bad" is kind of a weak descriptor.
Something like, just as an example:

"We need a saviour to stem the tide of our sins
before the worlds collide
we need a hero to heal our minds
and cleanse the evils inside"

might flow better. Take my words for what you will because I'm rather new at the writing process. Just a suggestion. Goodluck Gent!


C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1437191


hey thanks dude that bit sounds better now im new to writing songs so this is one of my firsties