#1
Hey, new to hear. Thought I'd post my latest song (Still gotta get music with my band)
It would be a very heavy metal song, lot's of growls and screams.

Very much open to critic.


I'm falling down!
Into a hell!
I'm falling forever inside myself
Endless into this void. (Can I stop?)
When will it end?

Forever trapped inside my soul
I see darkness consume my heart
Forever black and forever alone!
I only see myself part!

Can you help me?
Can you pick me up of the ground?
Can't you see, can't you see that you're the one!
The one who can save me
(From what I've become)

Oh please help me
Help me discover the world
Help me discover what I can be
Help me discover who I am
Oh please, please save me.
(From what I've become)

I just need a touch, a kiss
To awaken me from the darkness
A light to guide me out of this hell
Can you be my angel?
My angel of life!

Can you help me?
Can you pick me up of the ground?
Can't you see, can't you see that you're the one!
The one who can save me
(From what I've become)

My world is crashing around me
What can I do to stop it?
I can't help but watch
Can you drag me out of myself?

I've become secluded
I've become diluted
I've become heartless
I've become lost
Can you hear for me?
Can you heal me?
Can you give me a heart?
Can you find me?

Can you help me?
Can you pick me up of the ground?
Can't you see, can't you see that you're the one!
The one who can save me
(From what I've become)

From this world of lies
World of hate
I've fallen deep inside my shell

Will you help me?
Will you pick me up of the ground?
Will you see, will you see that you're the one!
The one who can save me
(From what I've become)
#2
lol it's good xD i like it, how it sounds depend on the rythm but it's cool... i wouldn't make it so long unless you have a quick rythm xD
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