#1
An alt. rock lyrical work of mine. Enjoy!


I only walk in the rain,
‘cause that’s all that appeals to me.
I only sleep in the dark,
‘cause I’m afraid of what I see.
And I’m lying in the dirt,
with a chain wrapped around my waist.
I’m as helpless as justice,
and I’m also just as misplaced.

I only think in my house,
with all the windows closed up tight.
I only walk empty streets,
because I’m not looking to fight.
So I’m sitting in a chair,
and the legs are about to break.
Very much like my own legs,
if it’s the wrong hand that I shake.

And I’m lying in the dirt,
with a chain wrapped around my waist.
I’m as helpless as justice,
and I’m also just as misplaced.
And I’m lying in the dirt,
with a brother and a good friend.
And the difference between us,
Is that my life hasn’t yet come to an end.

And why must you rise,
when the rest of us fall.
And why must you rise,
you’re killing us all,

And why must you rise,
when the rest of us fall.
And why must you rise,
you’re killing us all,
you’re killing us all.
I'm just like the Jonas Brothers,

I'm no longer relevant and write mediocre music.


Last edited by CPDmusic at May 4, 2011,
#2
Jesus, this was good.

I feel like some of it was a little too direct, but the cleverness of some of the lines made up for it.

The 2nd stanza was probably my favorite, with the last half of the 3rd stanza coming in a close 2nd.

As I said, the only complaint is the direct approach, but, it was clever, so I was able to look past it.
Poop.


Yes, poop.
#3
Dude this is awesome. I love the lyrics. good flow throughout. I think the last two stanzas could have more potential. but overall this is a real nice piece. i even fiddled on my guitar with it a little. *Don't worry, I'm not a thief * good job. check out mine!

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#4
Quote by MattAnderson111
Jesus, this was good.

I feel like some of it was a little too direct, but the cleverness of some of the lines made up for it.

The 2nd stanza was probably my favorite, with the last half of the 3rd stanza coming in a close 2nd.

As I said, the only complaint is the direct approach, but, it was clever, so I was able to look past it.

Just for editing purposes, which parts would you say could change, as far as being too direct.
I'm just like the Jonas Brothers,

I'm no longer relevant and write mediocre music.