#1
(Verse)

Falling down into nothing but space
I can't help but wonder why
Its you I see in this ocean of nothing

Drifting on ill be living my days out
quietly with nothing to say
But your on my mind all the time

(Pre-chorus)

Do you hear me scream while you sleep?
I'm out here calling you name
Do you feel me while you dream?
Or am I'm just fading away?

(Chorus)

Make me real again
Bring me back from oblivion
Form me into what I used to be

Take my heart soul
Say you'll never let go
Bring me back from oblivion

Bring me back

(Verse)

Endless day with me and my mind all
Alone yet I feel your here with me
By my side throughout the night

I hold you hand and look in your eyes but
Then I see that your starting to wake
And you dissapear and leave me here

(Pre-chorus)

Do you hear me scream while you sleep?
I'm out here calling you name
Do you feel me while you dream?
Or am I'm just fading away?

(Chorus)

Make me real again
Bring me back from oblivion
Form me into what I used to be

Take my heart soul
Say you'll never let go
Bring me back from oblivion

Bring me back

(Solo)

(Pre-chorus)

Do you hear me scream while you sleep?
I'm out here calling you name
Do you feel me while you dream?
Or am I fading away?

(Chorus)x2

Make me real again
Bring me back from oblivion
Form me into what I used to be

Take my heart soul
Say you'll never let go
Bring me back from oblivion

(Outro)

Bring me back x4
There is a saying in poetry, "show me, don't tell me." here you are announcing everything, like an announcer to a sporting event. "Dave has the ball. Dave passes the ball. Dave picks his ass."

~Zanascross

XD epic win
#2
I enjoy most of this, but from a completely lyrical view as of now. The chorus has to be my favorite part, the 3rd line in the 1st stanza "The ocean of nothing", that doesn't really hit me right, but, it might hit you more than me.

Do you feel me while you dream?
Or am I fading away?

This part is also good, where I actually stopped reading and looked over it again. I'm definitely interested to see what genre this will turn out to be.
Poop.


Yes, poop.