#1
Actually posted this song a few months ago, but I've tweaked it again, and can't figure out how to get back to the original thread, so I'll start a new one. Even with this version, I'm not totally satisfied, I feel like something about it isn't really good (Though I an definitely my own worst critic, so I dunno...), but I can't put my finger on why. So if you have any suggestions on improving it, or at least can tell me what about it might or might not be good, then by all means...


Verse 1:
The moon was full and the sun had set
When I saw your eyes drifting to the left
I didn't know what to do or to say or think
So I chose the lie; I chose to believe
That despite the past, that this could ever last
But it all just happened much too fast
So it all slowed down so that I could see
Just what the future had held from me

Chorus:
But I can't just leave all your memories here
Your presence, it still lingers here
Always reminding me who I am

Verse 2:
Well the board is full and the pieces are set
But I'm still trying to catch a train that's already left
If I had known what to do or to say or think
I just might have been able to believe
That despite the past, that this could ever have lasted
Both our bodies laying in the grass
But now that tomorrow's bright enough to see
I'll move on and face reality

Chorus:
But I can't just leave all your memories here
I'll keep them with me for these next four years
Just to remind myself who I am

Bridge:
Growing old just waiting, waiting
Growing old just waiting, waiting
Growing old just waiting to be
Happy, no that won't be, wont' be me

Verse 3:
Now my mind is full of all the goals I've set
And I feel myself drifting to the west
I couldn't tell you what tomorrow brings
But whatever happens, it was meant to be
Like that night we spent together on the tracks
And even if I could, I wouldn't take it back
I only wish that you could see
That I'm not the world, this isn't everything

Chorus:
Well I can't just leave all these memories here
I'll keep them with me for these next four years
Just to remind myself who I am
"Love everything. Know nothing."

"What do you mean 'do you even know how to play bongo drums?'?! Do I not have hands?! And pot?!"
Last edited by TheJake1 at May 24, 2011,
#2
Oh and I'll C4C, just provide a link if ya can
"Love everything. Know nothing."

"What do you mean 'do you even know how to play bongo drums?'?! Do I not have hands?! And pot?!"