#1
So this is my song. Simply worded. Short and sweet. Structurally it is not complete but i feel all the pieces are there.

Whaddya think?


In the days of sunshine
Thats where i see you
And i hope thats how you go on being
As the world sees you through

Just one more drive
On a sunday afternoon
Tell me your stories agai
Please dont mind if i just sit here listening to you

The life youve had
Was no easy road
I cant say i would blame you
If you feel its your time to go

So many lessons
Such little bits of time
Im sorry that youre hurting
Im sorry youre pain is not mine

Quite the reversal of roles
From many years gone by
Let me hold your hand now
Get some rest, close your eyes

You will always be smiling
On my darkest of days
And just like youve always done for me
I know ill find my way

In the days of sunshine
Thats where i see you
And i hope thats how you go on being
As this world sees you through
cut. it. out.
#2
Great lyrics! They were all perfect and all flowed smoothly and i love the whole happy, loving nature of them.. but.. there is one possible flaw i see. I could be totally wrong, but the song i would imagine having those lyrics in seems a bit too long. Of course i haven't heard the song, and it could be perfectly paced and interesting, but if you are using the same melodies for more than like 2 of those paragraphs, your song may be too long, and lose the listeners attention. That's just something to double check, and forgive me for criticizing without a perfect knowledge of the song.

Great job, lengthy or not!
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