I like your voice, but it's really 'breathy'. It would sound a lot better if it were sung out loud with more emotion. The song is alright as is, but could be a lot more. The end verses need to be more 'climaxy' too. Don't really know how to put it. Hope that helps.

the only part that i think can use work is the chorus part . Some of the notes seemed flat but thats all i really notices. Very good