#1
strike a match and tell me your name
lose the dice, stop playing a game
tell me the story of your smooth and rough
I'll put up a hand when enough's enough

sell me you're favourite colour as if you owned the shop
let me persuade you to let the prices drop

out of the darkness, comes the light
out of the darkness, comes the light yeah

pick an adequate theme for the atmosphere
let me write a review of your inner ear

out of the darkness, comes the light
out of the darkness, comes the light yeah

I wanna hear you swing on the chandelier
I wanna hear the scream of your bombardier
I wanna blow by blow of the sabateur
I wanna blow by blow for the hard to hear

strike a match and tell me your name
let it bounce around the naked flame

out of the darkness, comes the light
out of the darkness, comes the light yeah
out of the darkness, comes the light
out of the darkness, comes the light yeah
#2
Quote by Jammydude44
strike a match and tell me your name
lose the dice, stop playing a game
tell me the story of your smooth and rough
I'll put up a hand when enough's enough

good start, i especially liked the third line.

sell me you're favourite colour as if you owned the shop
let me persuade you to let the prices drop

This was confusing

out of the darkness, comes the light
out of the darkness, comes the light yeah

pick an adequate theme for the atmosphere
let me write a review of your inner ear

out of the darkness, comes the light
out of the darkness, comes the light yeah

I wanna hear you swing on the chandelier
I wanna hear the scream of your bombardier
I wanna blow by blow of the sabateur
I wanna blow by blow for the hard to hear

I'm not understanding the blow by blow lines.

strike a match and tell me your name
let it bounce around the naked flame

out of the darkness, comes the light
out of the darkness, comes the light yeah
out of the darkness, comes the light
out of the darkness, comes the light yeah


Im not much of a song critic... I just thought i would say hello, mostly.
#3
Love the first stanza.
sell me you're favourite colour as if you owned the shop
let me persuade you to let the prices drop
^^ This bit felt rough - you're should be your, and I didn't like the flow through "let... let." Maybe sub a different verb for the second let?
I wanna hear you swing on the chandelier
I wanna hear the scream of your bombardier
I wanna blow by blow of the sabateur
I wanna blow by blow for the hard to hear
I thought this stanza felt forced; particularly the second and third lines. Also, saboteur is spelled with an o.
strike a match and tell me your name
let it bounce around the naked flame
I originally read the first line as "strike a naked match..." and I was disappointed to have to correct myself. Of course, naked match doesn't work with naked flame, but there may be something there...

peace
Nothing to see here. Move along.