#1
so many foreign roads re-routed through the neighborhood
where you and my father first settled in to reminisce
upon the dawn; we haven't spoken in awhile, in one of those
earthly dialogues that dimmed with my adolescence.
i'm driving back now to tinker with their iridescense
(or whatever is left of it). the passing exit signs
pulse with newer cities; wolves howl their purple songs
and i perceive a dusk forming in me. for the first time,
i wonder what yet remains of our love;
i wonder if to you i've been a good son;
in this troubling twilight, i wonder if
you feel like you've lost a part of your womanhood,
if this illness has stolen every semblance of home
once cherished together at dinnertime. and i feel it too.
there are so many tollways re-routed toward you,
so many businessmen lending an open palm,
grinning horribly, their stocks and bonds
stuck in their teeth. they've no interest in me,
none in particular, and neither does the world.
but there's a house on the end of a lamp-lit street
with willows weeping over a loss of innocence or
of permanence or just this mid-may freeze,
and if i can find my way there, i know i'll find
your natural shine of femininity, i'll watch the afterglow
be born and then spread. and then over dinner
we'll reminisce about our days of glory, and hopefully
we won't have to pretend that many more
await the both of us ahead.
here, My Dear, here it is
Last edited by SubwayToVenus at May 26, 2011,
#2
BON IVER BON IVER BON IVER BON IVERRR

so excellent. your writing just keeps getting more and more fluid.
#5
thanks for reading. ill get to both of yours as soon as i can. i think i owe some other people as well
here, My Dear, here it is
#7
:/

this hit me really hard. I hope you're okay. would rather not crit.
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#8
Quote by Arthur Curry
it's official, vintage x metal is the saving grace of this board and/or the antichrist




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theguitarist
minterman22
tateandlyle
& alaskan_ninja

#9
This is a great piece; I'm a sucker for nostalgia and wistful-type things, which is how I took this (at least in part), so I quite enjoyed it. Although I haven't seen much of your writing, you always seem to deliver; this is no exception. Hopefully it isn't reflective of anything actually going on for you, though.
#10
Wow, this was beautiful. I really really wish I could offer some constructive criticism but there is literally nothing I would change about this. Fantastic.

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#11
Only love is all maroon.

I like.
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