#1
Stone teeth
Granite phrases
Spiked shoes with
Rattlesnake shoelaces

Call left waiting
Hiroshima
Timed debating
through a dirty mirror

This cable car seems to get me
in lots of trouble
longs sighs, rolling eyes
touch my chin, rub the stubble.
Turn on the lights I think I'll,
but up a while.
My life's so TV Land,
my life's so Green Mile.

Coffee, Ice cream
Fries from McDonalds,
Summer heat storm,
Create rebuttals.

Work gloves, blue jeans,
missed calls and emails,
sleep medication,
local brew pale ales.

This cable car seems to get me
in lots of trouble
longs sighs, rolling eyes
touch my chin, rub the stubble.
Turn my head out the window,
try to see the view,
My life's so Boondock Saints
My life's so PS I Love You.
#4
Hmm, I think I like this. It reminded me of a more serious Das Racist rap-kinda piece. I'm not sure if that's what you were going for but it's definitely a compliment. Most people string together nouns like this in a rather haphazard way, digging for rhymes and such, but you tied it into your theme really well and this whole thing felt very cohesive. So cohesive in fact, that I am quite sure I like this. It was different and done really well so kudos to you, sir.

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