#2
Well, it's ok.

I can see that you had fun but the instrumentalization is bit bland. I would prefer a few more dynamics.
For example: you could get a bit more rough and distorted on the guitar during the chorus whereas your strumming on verse part fits quite well.

Continue working on your craft!
#5
I agree with G. Krizzel - you need to up the energy going into the chorus. That whole song works on the concept of increasing and decreasing intensity. She blasts during the chorus, then takes it down a bit for the verse before blasting into the next chorus. Without that dynamic, the whole song is kind of bland.
#6
Include dynamics, and you're amazing!!

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