#1
Lately, I'm content with a seat
on the upper level of the train
on my way home from work;
I watch the passing houses-
some with above-ground swimming pools,
though most are without those.
In my seat, all there's to do
is either watch
or sleep.

Sometimes, if I drift into an innocent fog,
I'm drowsy enough to hear
the houses approach;
I hear the chime of a mother's laughter-
her daughters diving in the water
to splash her. If that momentafter exists,
once my train has roared past,
what is there left to do
than it
or that
or this?

The tracks will bend toward our home,
and I know our screen door is open;
the wind from me to you whistles
like an afternoon above an ocean.
But in my seat, I cannot see in front of me
nor what lays behind.

It's supposed to rain tonight,
so if you're free we could stay in,
perhaps watch a movie on the television
and then fall asleep in the family room
before the next work day begins,
and the dew on the blades of the grass
between the rocks on the sides of the tracks
glistens - just like these days
all seem to do
lately.
here, My Dear, here it is
Last edited by SubwayToVenus at Jun 4, 2011,
#4
I dearly and sincerely and almost desperately hope you are okay. this was very beautiful.
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#6
@merriman: the last couple pieces that i've posted were a lot more depressing and dealt with more sadness. i think she is simply referring to that. you are right though, this is definitely meant to be more positive. there is deeper personal significance for me in this (which due to the circumstances naturally gives me a twinge of sorrow) but on its surface for the reader, i wanted it to be beautiful in a positive way. thanks for reading. i'll get to yours for sure.

@saadia: thank you so much. it means a lot for you to be concerned, but i really am fine. it's just family stuff, you know how it goes

@rooster: i'm really glad you were able to take something from this. it always makes me happy when i can evoke something through my poem. i see you have a piece so i'll take a look at that.
here, My Dear, here it is
#7
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@rooster: i'm really glad you were able to take something from this. it always makes me happy when i can evoke something through my poem. i see you have a piece so i'll take a look at that.



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#9
Fantastic. This really is a perfect blend of imagery, lyricism, poise, and emotion. The last two stanzas are some of the best I've ever read from you so keep up the good work. I'm really sorry to hear that this inspires personal sorrow, though. Family stuff is never easy so I wish you all the best with that.

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