I like it.

Personally I can see it as a full electronic track..just seems to be more fit for that than sticking it in a metal song.

But that's just me
Never imagine yourself not to be otherwise than what it might appear to others that what you were or might have been was not otherwise than what you had been would have appeared to them to be otherwise
Dude, this is the start of a potentially great song. You should roll with the electronic ball and see how it turns out.