#2
It's a bit messy, but the guitar parts work and the chords at the end aren't bad - would benefit from a bit tighter recording and better quality of production to really highlight the pros and cons

But did you really write the line "The sun is shining and everyone feels good"...

I do think that if you properly structured this song and gave it justice with decent recording it's the kind of thing people would want to hear.
#3
Quote by joni_xz
It's a bit messy, but the guitar parts work and the chords at the end aren't bad - would benefit from a bit tighter recording and better quality of production to really highlight the pros and cons

But did you really write the line "The sun is shining and everyone feels good"...

I do think that if you properly structured this song and gave it justice with decent recording it's the kind of thing people would want to hear.


Ya haha i wrote this in about 30 minutes and the lyrics were done adlibbed as i was running the track i had no idea where i was going with them they were sort of freestyled you could say. But thanks for the feedback
#4
I agree, it is a bit all over the place, recording quality makes it difficult to properly criticise. The solo needs work but the general guitar parts sound decent. Vocals not too bad either, decent lyrics. Overall not bad at all

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=27370746#post27370746 c4c?
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#5
Quote by Donkey Fly
I agree, it is a bit all over the place, recording quality makes it difficult to properly criticise. The solo needs work but the general guitar parts sound decent. Vocals not too bad either, decent lyrics. Overall not bad at all

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=27370746#post27370746 c4c?


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#7
Mostly sounds just like parts of different songs thrown together, but it could be a lot better with proper/better recording and a lot tighter. Nothing really stands out to me to be honest, just the chorus was a lot louder than the verse. Not really a fan of the guitar tones either. Could be improved a lot, just think the quality of the song is what's most noticeable to me.

C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1449134