#1
I enjoyed writing this and wanted to know what other people thought about it. let me know!! thanks.


Won't somebody come around.
And don't gimme the run around.
I need you here right now.

Teach me how to survive
Cuz today I wanna be alive
I wrote the book on misery
And she's a killer isn't she?

Been slowly diein day by day
wontchya come, just take me away?
I need to hear what you've got-to say
Whatcha gonna do today?

Won't somebody come around.
And don't gimme the run around.
I need you here right now.

Any way you wanna...
Just tell me you wanna
Tell me what to do
Tell me how to get to you

Gotta get this killer outta me
It's bad enough, can't you see?
Just tell me why, why was it me?
#2
as a whole, i didnt think it was too bad...that being said, certain parts were very weak, ie, the chorus (come around). i think it could definitely use some polishing with rephrasing/word choice