#1
Blue

Chaos, Stop control
My flesh is too venerable
And yet again we come to
This decision, Its killing me

Chaos, Stop control
My flesh is too venerable
And yet again we come to
This decision, Its killing me

Black and Blue
I come to you
Don't try to save me
I don't want to see

Help me lose
I can't win
I die
I die trying

And yet again we come to
This decision, Its killing me


Black and Blue
I come to you
Don't try to save me
I don't want to see


Black and Blue
I come to you
Don't try to save me
I don't want to see
#2
hey you song doesnt make sense but i like that. the structure is good, i like the way you repeated `choas. stop control`. try and add more imagery and add some contrastslike opposites. other than that it is good