#1
Through it all
You’re the obvious choice
You’re my everything
You’re my voice

You make the darkness
Look bright
You make the worst of times
Alright

Your so beautiful to me
You will never be
A distant memory

Don’t worry my dear
I am coming
Don’t you fear

This is the paper
This is the pen
This is what I’ll write
I’ll love you til then end
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#2
hmmm........ kinda weak. nothing really memorable in it. but dont get me wrong. its got potential. just add some depth so it isnt all two dimensional. take a look at mine if you want its called 'sinking...'
#4
thanks for the crit guys this is actually one of the few "sweet" songs i've ever written. I guess i just decided to write it cause of the mood i was in.
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#5
hey the song doesnt really tell the story, its like a saying a few words to some one. addd more variety, contrast and add more things that describe were you are and what situation you are in. sorry to be mean. but keep trying, you will get there
#6
it was a quick write not my best work but just thought I would post it anyways. I have quite alot of lyrics.
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#7
A lot of people say they don't like how it's short, but i disagree. concise...ness is good. i think it makes it more powerful when it isnt a 96 verse long, 53 minute epic detailing every minute of your relationship.

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