#1
I never really write poetry, I write songs, but this kinda just came out. Just came to me, wrote it in like two minutes. Lemme know what you think


Yesterday
I found myself
Tired and alone
Yet I looked into a mirror
And I saw you

Today
I blindly assumed
That I would see you
When I looked in the mirror
But you weren't there

Tomorrow
If I shall wake
I want to see you
No longer in the mirror
But in person
#2
I am no poet myself nor do i write a lot of lyrics or poems. However I would think that adding a regular rhythm would make it sound better. But maybe that is just me.

EDIT.
Sorry nevermind, there is a regular rhythm i just counted wrong.
Last edited by Tangerineseeker at Jun 13, 2011,
#4
It's quite moving. I'm astonished you wrote this in two minutes.
BEWARE THE BANANA ARMY.

I SAY, I SAY, BEWARE THE BANANA ARMY.

They say when they finally attack, all the impostors will peel themselves. In order to tell if you have been assimilated, check for a zipper somewhere near your pelvis.


#5
Describes how I feel sometimes as well. I think it sounds fine the way it is...
C4C... deal?


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#6
Yesterday, all my troubles seemed so far awa-

Nope, wrong song... Sorry... Cool poem man! Short and sweet will always be number one to me.
#7
Very nice, man. Most good poems/songs are the ones that randomly come to you and are written in like under 5 minutes
"Love everything. Know nothing."

"What do you mean 'do you even know how to play bongo drums?'?! Do I not have hands?! And pot?!"
#8
thanks everybody, im glad some random two minutes could provide enjoyment for you haha
#9
It definitely shows that it came to you whole. The flow is great and the focus is sharp. I dig it.
#10
To me it is not quite descriptive enough but it is good none the less.