I never really write poetry, I write songs, but this kinda just came out. Just came to me, wrote it in like two minutes. Lemme know what you think

I found myself
Tired and alone
Yet I looked into a mirror
And I saw you

I blindly assumed
That I would see you
When I looked in the mirror
But you weren't there

If I shall wake
I want to see you
No longer in the mirror
But in person
I am no poet myself nor do i write a lot of lyrics or poems. However I would think that adding a regular rhythm would make it sound better. But maybe that is just me.

Sorry nevermind, there is a regular rhythm i just counted wrong.
Last edited by Tangerineseeker at Jun 13, 2011,
It's quite moving. I'm astonished you wrote this in two minutes.


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Describes how I feel sometimes as well. I think it sounds fine the way it is...
C4C... deal?

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Nope, wrong song... Sorry... Cool poem man! Short and sweet will always be number one to me.
Very nice, man. Most good poems/songs are the ones that randomly come to you and are written in like under 5 minutes
"Love everything. Know nothing."

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thanks everybody, im glad some random two minutes could provide enjoyment for you haha
It definitely shows that it came to you whole. The flow is great and the focus is sharp. I dig it.
To me it is not quite descriptive enough but it is good none the less.