#1
We build these walls
To keep the monster in
We build these walls
And mark them with our sin

We build these walls
With our own blood and bone
We build these walls
This tomb becomes our home

These walls, won’t fall
Won’t fail, won’t break
Won’t crack, won’t quake

We build these walls
To keep you all away
We build these walls
To block out what you say

These walls, won’t fall
Won’t fail, won’t break
Won’t crack, won’t quake

These walls
These walls
These walls
These walls
Time to tear them down

We build these walls
To see who tears them down
We build these walls
To tear them to the ground

These walls, will fall
Will fail, will break
Will crack, will quake


Pretty straight forward. Its nothing profound. But comments are always welcomed and encouraged.
#2
Nothing abnormal in structure and the repetition. There's one thing I do feel should need more thought, and that is the story. I'm assuming that you're telling through the lyrics the tale of pschological,spiritual shields that one places to protect himself from whatever he needs to protect himself from. Yet I couldn't quite grasp why you'd add at the end "to tear them to the ground."
Seems rather counter-active, in my opinion. XD
#3
best, most descriptive line in the piece:

We build these walls
To see who tears them down

I enjoy this part because when folks put up walls they really do want someone to care enough to pull them down. I like how you took a heavy avenue to describe isolating yourself and not letting people in. Creative to me and the whole thing has a decent rhythmic feel to it. Well done.

Crit Mine?
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#4
this. was. amazing.
i liked it alot, the only critique that i hav is that i feel ther should be another line after "Won’t crack, won’t quake" since that verse feels kinda empty to me. keep on writing
Roses are red
Violets are blue
I write poetry
And it sucks.