#1
I came out to see the world
Instant Chains trap me and my soul
Wait Wait this isn’t normal
Wait Wait I must break free

No the key to break free is prohibited
You show it to me as the disease
I learn to hate it
I want to hate it
But is still the key to be free

I’m free and killing myself
The freezing chains you once put on me
No its time to break me free
I am evil as you can see.


What do you say? is this good?
#2
It's good, very vivid and descriptive. I liked how you used "freezing" to describe the metallic chains. I'd just work a bit on the language. I feel there are missing words, unless you intented them to be left out.
For instance:
"But (it) is still the key to be(ing) free"
"Instant(ly) [instant doesn't really work on material things] chains trap(ped) me and my soul"

Those two lines were the only one I'd consider revising. All together, it's a moving piece.
BEWARE THE BANANA ARMY.

I SAY, I SAY, BEWARE THE BANANA ARMY.

They say when they finally attack, all the impostors will peel themselves. In order to tell if you have been assimilated, check for a zipper somewhere near your pelvis.


#4
been listening a lot to death, canibal corpse, mayhem, metallica, slayer..and i came with this lol