#1
When the hydrogen at the core of a star runs out the star expands
The force of heavier elements being fused pushes harder against gravity
Nearby planets and bodies are burnt and engulfed
The star is left as a swollen abomination
A freak image of its former self

I guess I can liken you to this even more now, friend
All that pain and anger just gets used up and new feelings come about
The memories; squeezed dry, emotion forced on them
You don't know how to feel now, do you?
You're struggling to regain it; the way you always felt
Pushing out and burning those nearby

If my comparisons are correct then I know your fate
The time I've spent in your light
I've learnt I can't change you, so I'll sit and watch
You're glow is dim for now
But the light show will come soon

I suppose I like being burnt by you, friend.


Back again, hope you guys like the piece. C4C and all that jazz, post a link to your piece in your comment if you want a crit.
It didn't take long to realise
The safest place was not her arms, but her eyes
Where she can't see you
For her gaze, it blisters;
Grey skin to cinders
#2
I really liked the comparison between the star and a person. I had not thought of a way to do it before. Something I would've liked to see was less explanation in words and sentences. Use of more symbolism, perhaps. Just throwing that out there.
BEWARE THE BANANA ARMY.

I SAY, I SAY, BEWARE THE BANANA ARMY.

They say when they finally attack, all the impostors will peel themselves. In order to tell if you have been assimilated, check for a zipper somewhere near your pelvis.


#3
I'll keep that in mind with the next part. Thank you
It didn't take long to realise
The safest place was not her arms, but her eyes
Where she can't see you
For her gaze, it blisters;
Grey skin to cinders