#1
Just wrote this one. It's called "Cibola", tell me what you think!

“Cibola”

Verse 1&2:
She dreams in colors
That don’t exist
She screams aloud sometimes,
Always without sound

Tide goes in, Tide goes out.
Part of life is doubt

Pre-chorus:
No one knows,
My inner-most thoughts
No one knows,
These words that I
Jot down.

Chorus:
This is music, in high def.
Revealing every thought, that ever snuck in to my head
So, now it’s begun
Girl, let me in, and we’ll sing into the sun!

Verse 3&4:
Every word she speaks
Sparks a war
Every breath she takes
Forms a Hurricane

Ebb and flow, Earth and Fire,
You have my word, but I’m a liar.

(Pre-chorus)
(Chorus)

Verse 5&6:
Wherever she points,
A miracle occurs
Wherever she stands,
A monument is built.

Life and Death, Black and White,
A shade of gray to F**k with my life

(Pre-chorus)
(Chorus)

Bridge:
I’ve heard the rumors!
I’ve believed ‘em all!
I’ve heard the rumors!
I’ve believed ‘em all!
I’ve heard the rumors!
I’ve believed ‘em all!
Come to Cibola,
Answer the call!

Outro Chorus:
Like a fool, I believed them all,
All the thoughts that snuck into my head.
So, now it’s begun.
Girl, let me in, and we’ll sing into the sun!
This is music, in high def.
Revealing every thought, that ever snuck in to my head
So, now it’s begun
Girl, let me in, and we’ll sing into the sun!
#2
What the **** is this? What?

What...?


What...!? Did you channel like 12 dead crazy people when you wrote this? What the **** is Cibola? I don't even want to look it up.

Uhh, this is like neo-surrealism, here's some advice from another neo-surrealist.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=91gDnBkAl8g&NR=1

Enjoy.

Also, here's my piece if you want to check it out:

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1453856
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#3
Ummmm... Please calm down? I don't even know what neo-surrealism is for one thing, and Cibola is the legendary city of gold!! This song is about a girl who confuses and baffles me, nothing more!!! Any ways I'll still look at your song