Don't take me too seriously, because I wasn't serious when I wrote it. I'm just in a really impish mood. Enjoy!

So, I’m bored.
Staring at the computer on the living room floor
Nothing much going on
And my parents are gone

And I think I might get into some trouble…

My phone’s on silent
But it’s dead anyway
Forgot to charge it
But there’s nothing to say

And I think I might be a bit lonely…

Got a tan this morning
But without any warning
The sun blinked at the sky
And it started to cry

And I think I might be a bit soggy…

My friend the ceiling
Is looking more appealing
With every very hour I stare
And imagine you’re there

And I think I might actually miss you…

Hello, I’m myself
And yet, someone else
And thus my rhyme
About me wasting time

And I think I might go talk to stranger…
Reminds me of Bjork. This could be a totally fun song with the right music.
Really good. I think this is the 3rd or 4th song of yours I've read through while I'm supposed to be working on a paper, and I think the genius of the piece is that you don't say too much.

The one thing that stands out to me is the stanza about the sun is a lot less concrete than the immediately preceding stanza. I think the whole thing would fall into place a little better if you switched the 3rd and 4th stanzas. That way the song proceeds directly from most concrete to most abstract in a nice sequence. And, the setting progresses from the house, to flashback/outside, to abstract. You can let the listener's imagination fill in the imagery and meaning on the last verse by forcing them to conjecture the next thing in the progression.

Another wonderful song. Great job.

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