#1
seeing ghosts in my car
getting chased by wolves
doing good drugs with monsters
girls who take novelty on me
doing bad drugs with monsters
who've done time for crimes they didn't commit
(but they just can't admit it)
theyve never felt the world all at once
never heard a sound repeating infinitely
people with pearls in their eyes ,
doing bad drugs with monsters
who've done time for crimes they didn't commit
(I don't believe it)


and the ghost in my car.
#2
theyve never felt the world all at once
never heard a sound repeating infinitely
people with pearls in their eyes

apart from this verse I like it, this verse seems sort of airy if that makes sense. I think this song suits gritty semi reality more. This verse just seems forced, quite cliche.

The rest is good though, would like to hear it when its finished
#3
it is finished..

thank you for the crit though. i have to argue that that particular section you mentioned is sort of necessary to what im trying to say though. I'll work on the wording a bit if anything
#4
I like the words. I like the imagery and the diction. I didn't feel like the motifs congealed into a theme, though. Seems like the title could as easily be "stents" or "stunts."

peace