Well it's pretty good, you clearly know what you're doing:p You could clean a lot of stuff up though, I wouldn't of palm muted those chords at like 0:44 and on, it would of given it more presence and the timing was off just a little and you could really hear that with the palm muted. But it's just noodling so it doesn't really matter. Yeah, you just need to clean it up a lot and it could be pretty awesome.