#1
one. I think this one is the best of the songs i have written. More in the style that i want to write in. Although i'm not to sure about that "bridge" before the final chorus. I think i should just replace the bridge with the chorus and have chorus go 2 times around before ending.

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Meant to be


Do you feel like we were never meant to be?
even though we tried?
We played a trick on destiny
We altered the course of time
Did we really think, we would find happiness?
Did we really think we would be content, with the life that we have?


We can't be together
Not like this.
Cause everything we had wasn't real
We're like a simulation
A rather poor imitation
Of what we were meant to be.

I seemed to think we would always be together.
through thick and thin.
but more and more lately
I've wondered where you've been
Did we really think, we would have connection?
Did we really think we would find success, with the life that we had?

When I tried to save ourselves, I realized that it would never work
Cause I was dumb, I was blind, I failed to see that
We can't be together
Not like this.
Cause everything we had wasn't real
We're like a simulation
A rather poor imitation
Of what we were meant to be.
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"Those who dream by night, in the dusty recesses of their minds wake in the day to find that all was vanity; but dreamers of the day are dangerous men, for they may act their dream with open eyes, and make it possible."
#2
I like it. Simple and straight forward. The lead sounds nice.

It sounds like there's a little bit of a hiss in the background, but in a way it adds warmness to the track.

I think the vocals sound a little bit dry, and could also use some increased compression IMO. The drum pattern could use a some variation I think. If I were working on this, I'd try experimenting with some musical pauses.

I like the section that opens the song, and comes back in around 1:25, I like it so much, I would like to hear more of it in the song.

C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1452595
#3
rich,
Thanks for the reviews! "Meant to Be": guitar playing & vocals are good. I think the guitar riffs are more catchy than the vocal melody (but it's good also). I realize this song is fairly mellow, though I wouldn't mind if there was more emotion in the singing (considering the lyrics). I agree the vocals could be compressed more. Good recording overall!

Edit: I guess the vocal melody was more catchy than I originally thought, because it was stuck in my head 1/2 hour later!
Last edited by aaron aardvark at Jun 30, 2011,
#4
i can't get your songs to work john. i'm sorry
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#5
ya know I just played this a little faster, and raised the key a whole step. I think it made it sound better. Should have recorded it that way, but oh well
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"Those who dream by night, in the dusty recesses of their minds wake in the day to find that all was vanity; but dreamers of the day are dangerous men, for they may act their dream with open eyes, and make it possible."
#6
A good bassline would really make this one, especially the verses, which could be very good, but are quite tame without the bass part IMO. Nothing wrong with the vocals I think, just needs a good imaginative riff for the 4 strings!

Here's one of mine for a bit of the ol' C4C if you like:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uGykeuRQjqg
#7
i think that composition of yours was great. Sounds very Beatles to me. Almost like "Because"
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"Those who dream by night, in the dusty recesses of their minds wake in the day to find that all was vanity; but dreamers of the day are dangerous men, for they may act their dream with open eyes, and make it possible."
#9
I agree with wireless89 that a nice bassline would really boost the song. Your voice fits this music style perfectly, as does the vocal melody. The real thing that shines in this song is the intro/bridge guitar part. Having a catchy guitar melody can be as good as a vocal melody, look at Day Tripper, people remember it for the guitar line. Good job on this!

C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1456697
#10
Hey, liked the song dude, seem to be a lot of mellow UGers im reviewing lately (probably a good thing). For some reason wasnt expecting your voice to sound like this but I like the vocals, I like your phrasing. Also the little guitar thing in the middle was a nice touch. recording quality was also fantastic. Overal a great effort
#11
this line stuck with me

A rather poor imitation
Of what we were meant to be.

then the arpeggios that came after sounded awesome, as does everything in general. it sounds professionally recorded. everything is so clear, including the vocals which sound fantastic. the lyrics on the whole are a little simplistic but theres nothing wrong with that. i really like how the vocal melody goes up on the isnt reaaaAl, it gives it a little flare. it ends a little abrupty, maybe let the last chord ring out. maybe hold the meant to beeee with it, a little. just a thought

thanks for critiquing mine
#13
I like your voice, but it sounds like you're trying to keep it quiet, like you're holding back in a way (If that makes any sense).

The chorus is really catchy.
The whole song could have used bass.
Other than that, I can't think of much to say that hasn't been said.

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#14
Quote by kraftmacaroni
I like your voice, but it sounds like you're trying to keep it quiet, like you're holding back in a way (If that makes any sense).

The chorus is really catchy.
The whole song could have used bass.
Other than that, I can't think of much to say that hasn't been said.

If you could check out my bands facebook in my sig and like it if you enjoyed the music that would be great.


yeah i think the quiet style vocals were the result of picking a key that was a little bit on the low side. When i raised the key a whole step, i realized that it made me sing out a little bit more. I guess that's a lesson in how picking the right key is important.
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"Those who dream by night, in the dusty recesses of their minds wake in the day to find that all was vanity; but dreamers of the day are dangerous men, for they may act their dream with open eyes, and make it possible."