#1
Background:
The song is mostly about a man going to hell and facing all the horrors in there, and describing what he is experiencing and how it feels.

Lost! in my own senses
Trapped! my fear increases
Hurt! paying for my actions
Gone! everything has it’s reaction

Throwing stones at a bigger rock
This can’t be stopped, this is my end
How long will it take for my body to rot?

Can’t escape from this chains pushing me to the ground
OH!
Scream my throat out, just create myself more wounds
(High scream)
I deserve all of this, I had a dishonest way to live
Make me take back on my actions, it’s too late to repent
I live on PERPETUAL PUNISHMENT

Choke! Asphyxiate on my own lies
Deaf! No one can hear me cry
Blind! Can’t see who’s the one killing me
Taste! My own blood going down my face
Feel! This is the payment for my disgrace
Lost all senses
Took me out of your way

Stop this pain, I swear I’ll never sin again
Explosions inside my veins, I’m about to go insane

Can’t escape from this chains pushing me to the ground
OH!
Scream my throat out, just create myself more wounds
(High scream)
I deserve all of this, I had a dishonest way to live
Make me take back on my actions, make me regret
I live on PERPETUAL PUNISHMENT


Put me to rest
I can’t handle this pain anymore
Pierced my chest
Prayers are so useless; I can hear the demons roar
Take me out of this prison
I need to live, just find me a reason
All alone
Say your goodbyes because I’m already gone

Can’t escape from this chains pushing me to the ground
OH!
Scream my throat out, just create myself more wounds
(High scream)
I deserve all of this; I had a dishonest way to live
Make me take back on my actions, make me regret
I live on PERPETUAL PUNISHMENT
Can’t stop the pain and the fire burning me all around
OH!
Bleed my heart out, I’m feeling so down
I’m begging for mercy, I’m asking you to forgive my sins
There’s no way out, my soul isn’t clean
PERPETUAL PUNISHMENT
PERPETUAL PUNISHMENT
I’m gone..
PERPETUAL PUNISHMENT!
#2
Good lyrics can make the difference between a good song or not, Get a good solid beat, guitars, solo, etc. Make it WORK!!! go for it.
"The Demon Code prevents me from Declining a rock-off Challenge"

-Satan.
#3
i like some of it. it sounds like a heavy metal or some hardcore rock song so i dont know if the lyrics just hav to be real simple n the music is wat it counts for.

it would hav been good if you'd try n create a more distinct version of hell than the obvious one. also why not describe the reason for the protagonist to be in hell on the first place. its just lacking... idk, storyline(?) it is good for a heavy metal song but the lyrics dont stand good on their own. keep on writing though
Roses are red
Violets are blue
I write poetry
And it sucks.
Last edited by leafwhisperer at Jun 30, 2011,