#1
Hi All,

Still working away trying to get back into the flow of songwriting. As such I've just been working away pulling quick ideas together.

Here's something I wrote this afternoon, hope you enjoy it.

Please let me know what you think and any suggestions on how I could improve this and/or my writing.

Nothing Ever Changes

I wish I could open up,
the time thats passed,
Like an open book,
answers questions asked.

If i could just recall,
how the ending goes
A story stopped,
in a plot thats froze

Pre-Chorus
And my feet hurt,
And my minds blank
My eyes are getting heavy,
Failing to keep steady

Chorus
For I cant see...too far ahead.
Seems to me....it starts again.
And as the earth.... goes round the sun,
we remember....Its the same for everyone.

...Nothing ever changes...

If i could embrace,
who I think i see
untie his ropes
and set him free

Chorus
I cant see...too far ahead.
Seems to me....it starts again.
And as the earth.... goes round the sun,
we remember....Its the same for everyone.

Interlude x2
Been here...before
Back where we started
Go round...once more
Nothing ever changes

I cant see...too far ahead.
Seems to me....it starts again.

Last edited by FrontmanShields at Jul 5, 2011,
#3
I'd like to here this with music. The only thing that irked me a little i probably wouldn't have noticed listening to the song so i'm not gonna bother telling you haha
#5
Wow. Awesome lyrics. Funny thing, I could almost hear the background music to The Red by Chevelle in the background. Not sure why though. All the syllables just seem to match perfectly. Especially if you repeat "...Nothing ever changes..." like they repeat "...Seeing red again..." (If you don't know it, don't worry.) It would be cool to know what genre you're going for. That way I could get a clearer understanding of what this would sound like if it was recorded.
Last edited by gateway01 at Jul 5, 2011,
#6
It would be great to hear the song as well. The lyrics are good though
#8
Thank you all for the comments, its very much appreciated.

I only wrote this in my lunch break yesterday so currently doesn't have any music.

However, from your comments you have sealed this songs fate.

I'll write the music and record the song, looks like I've finally started my setlist.

Thanks again!
#9
I feel like it's missing a verse, to be honest. I love the way the chorus sums up the message of the song, but I still think there's room for exploring the metaphors presented. If anything, it's a good thing that it left me wanting more.

The only negative thing I can really think of is lack of connectivity from the verse to the pre chorus, and the pre chorus to the chorus. Any kind of transition would suit it well.

I really liked it, and would like to read more and hear the song itself.