#1
or is it too pushy?

I love you babe,
Believe me when i say,
I wouldnt say it if it werent true,
Cause I could never lie to you,

It seems like we're the only two on earth,
Cause I only see me and you,

its still needs work but lemme no what u think. Thanks in advance
#4
I love you babe - overused line
Believe me when i say - over used line
I wouldnt say it if it werent true,
Cause I could never lie to you, - overused rhyme of the words true and you.

It seems like we're the only two on earth,
Cause I only see me and you - overused simile.

sorry but you asked what I think, im hoping its constructive criticism when I say I suggest that you scrap these lyrics and start again. Otherise you're just wasting time :/
#5
I think the problem is that you're not quite sure what it is you want to say. Those lyrics seem like "I love you" with a lot of fluff.
#6
I agree with the other two posts. It almost seems like a collection of overused love lines.
#9
Here's a suggestion!

I don't hate you, babe!
Believe me when I say
I would tell you if it were true
'cause you know I'm that crude

It seems like we're the only two on Earth
because we survived the nuke
#10
Quote by kindadumb
Here's a suggestion!

I don't hate you, babe!
Believe me when I say
I would tell you if it were true
'cause you know I'm that crude

It seems like we're the only two on Earth
because we survived the nuke


Haha! I like it!