#1
Ok this is a song I wrote a few months ago with the intention of recording it for my bands debut album but the lyrics were mostly incomplete. A couple of weeks ago I completed the lyrics and formed a side project with my rhythm guitarist/ part time vocalist and drummer and we have less potential than our other band but I said I'd give it a try.


Outcast

Verse:
I'm on the outside
Trying to put myself into place
Im socially awkward
The one thing I don't wanna face
Nobody sees me
Or at least admits it
Been cool once or twice
But I never was A good fit
Chorus:
On my own
I have nobody
All alone
I see nobody
All I've known
I had nobody
I'm still no one
Who are you?

Verse
Standing alone in the hall
Only Bryans talking to me
I'm a piece of the brick wall
A stone nobody sees

Chorus

Bridge
Do you
Know how I feels
To be passed over
Zero recognition

Do you
Know how it feels
To hold no
Important position

Outro
I'm on the outside
Trying to put myself into place
I'm all alone
The fact I still wont face


So that's it.
Any feedback is appreciated. Also tell me if you think this is good enough to be on a full time band album or should I use it on my side projects album.
Last edited by musicman14579 at Jul 6, 2011,
#2
Well the lyrics could be the ingredients on the back of a soup can. As long as the music is good, and the lyrics fit, than hell, its great.
There's room for all of God's creatures; Right next to the mashed potatoes.
#5
Not bad, like the first dude said, as long as the music fits.
Guitars:
-Gibson Les Paul Custom Shop Silverburst (Invader/'59)
-Ovation ApplauseAE44II Elite Black Acoustic


Amps/Cabs
-Peavey 6505+ Head
Orange PPC2x12 Cab Black
-Behringer Ultracoustic ACX450 1x8 Acoustic Combo


Wayyyyy too many effects pedals...
#7
Quote by musicman14579

Verse
Standing alone in the hall
Only Bryans talking to me
I'm a piece of the brick wall
A stone nobody sees


Really? Is this referring to me or you?
Only part that needs correcting. Immediately.
#9
Quote by musicman14579



Outcast

Verse:
I'm on the outside
Trying to put myself into place
Im socially awkward
The one thing I don't wanna face
Nobody sees me
Or at least admits it
Been cool once or twice
But I never was A good fit

Chorus:
On my own
I have nobody
All alone
I see nobody
All I've known
I had nobody
I'm still no one
Who are you?

Verse
Standing alone in the hall
Only LI's talking to me
I'm a piece of the brick wall
A stone nobody sees

Chorus

Bridge
Do you
Know how I feels
To be passed over
Zero recognition

Do you
Know how it feels
To hold no
Important position

Outro
I'm on the outside
Trying to put myself into place
I'm all alone
The fact I still wont face



There. Happy now?