Sorry. If he's gonna sing about growing up in the hood, it shouldn't be so sugar coated. It just doesn't come off as believable with all the auto-tune and nursery rhyme melodies. I will say that at :36 in that video, that is a badass doober that kid rolled up. I can't roll for shit.

I'd crit this, but I just can't get over the song. Rap's a hard genre to do right, and only a handful of rappers put out good songs.

Also, by 'nobody seemed to care' do you mean that no one critted it voluntarily or no one returned your crits? The best way to get feedback is to give feedback first.