#1
------------Just uploaded a really rough improvisedish version to me profile if any1 wants to give it an ear--------


I'm watching you, I'm watching you soar
At one with the, at one with the wind

This green eyed, this green eyed monster
This green eye, will stick you, will stick you with pins

Pressed hard, pressed hard to the glass
the world that's you, the world that you knew
is a memory, is a melody past

Can I, Can I keep you
Can I, Can I hold you
So delicate, Fragile leopard
Can I, Can I keep you
Can I, Can I hold you
Can I, Show you the world and never let you go

I will pin, I will pin down your wings
I'll makedamnsure, your glory never fades

I'll stare, stare at the colour's you wear
I'll drive a spear through your heart, with painstaking care

With a painstaking care
I know your out there

Can I, Can I keep you
Can I, Can I hold you
So delicate, Little leopard
Can I, Can I keep you
Can I, Can I hold you
Can I Show you the world
Can I show the world you
and never let you go
Last edited by Stonesatreyu at Jul 26, 2011,
#2
its pretty interesting.

does it have a different meaning or its just about butterflies?
#4
This is really good, but is even better if you remove the idea of this been about a butterfly.

I thought about this as you talking to someone you cared about. Which might actually be what its about. But the butterfly title will always make you think your talking about butterflies.

Remove the butterfly title and you could have a real crowd pleaser here. Thanks.
#7
Don't change it how FrontmanShields suggested, it is way better if you think it is about a butterfly instead of some symbolism (at least on the first read). The lyrics are kind of mysterious, and it makes you think, and a title stating the symbolism or something along the lines of that would make it vulgar.