#1
I wrote this one after a long night and a bout of insomnia. It's meant to be a bit weird in rhythm because that's how the ideas came through whenI wrote it.


Been feeling this way for way to long.
Can't sleep, barely moving at all.
I'm tired of feeling this way. I need someone to save me.

Take this pain from me, cut out my heart and give it away.
I don't need it any more.
I don't want it any more.

Can't dream with these eyes.
I'm blind for now, can't see through this cloud.

Is this really worth it?
Is this how I will live this life?
It's like a scripted reality. Everyone is just another actor with bills to pay and a thousand broken dreams running through their mind.

Cut out my heart and give it away.
I'm done with it and the toll it takes on my sanity.

Fall into this trap with me. see the world in different shades of grey.
Fall away from the beaten path. And see the price I pay.

I tread on hallowed ground. The demons we created are all around.
They laugh and jeer in dark cheer, at the mistakes we make.

Cut my heart from my chest.
I don't want to feel any more.
Take my soul and throw it away.
I won't need it any more.

Darkness follows me.
So dark I can't see.
Someone save me.
From this age old sacrifice.

Take this pain from me, cut out my heart and give it away.
I don't need it any more.
I don't want it any more.
Any more.
#2
I kinda liked this. there are some lines that needs work but i'll leave that out since the majority of it is pretty good. keep on writing
Roses are red
Violets are blue
I write poetry
And it sucks.
#3
When reading this I was unable to really pin down the kind of musical genre you we going for. Which is good, I like versatility.

There are some really good lines in here, some of them really impressed me and got me thinking.

My favourite part is probably "with bills to pay and a thousand broken dreams ", thats a great way to look at the ordinary person as it's extremely true. How we all have dreams and end up with the same lives.

Good stuff, great to see insomnia been turned into something creative. Certainly not time wasted
#4
@ Frontman Sheilds
I normally write post hardcore and metal. This one could really depend on the music that goes with it.

And thank you to both of you for the comments.