Forgot I did this one., and its very ROUGH. The ending i think its crap so I'll prob scrap it when it comes to it, anyhoo.. this is a rough idea. Ignore the drums, its just a filler and missing parts, no bass either.
Well to he honest you pointed out the biggest flaw really, the drums. Otherwise the riffs are very solid, cleanly played and executed. I would choose a different guitar tone, this one is definitely on the right track but the chords don't have much power behind them. Structure seems pretty good, although I actually feel it should be longer, it feels almost rushed right around the 3:10 mark, like you are hurrying to get it done - Maybe expand on the clean section a bit, which I think could make the song a lot better, and it will filled out nicely.
I hate writing , i got 2 hours worth of riffs on my HD and cant even put them together lol.
Yeah I know the feeling, tons of stuff sitting around and nothing to do with it lol
Well the beginning riff is very good. Contrary to what someone else said I think the tone is pretty good. The drumming def needs some work, the blast beats sounded good. Its just those double bass parts. They sound a little rough. I love the tones you used in the clean section. Very nice stuff. Keep it up bro.