with this song? it definitely needs stuff, what sort of stuff should I add??

and if you can crit the song for me youd have ounces of my gratitude! pounds even!

song is in my profile "Highest Grade....."
Post the lyrics here or it will be removed on the basis that it's an obvious "Look at my profile" thread
I will crit it when it's here.
Music is an art form that celebrates potential. So long as you're looking for it, you'll always find it.