#1
with this song? it definitely needs stuff, what sort of stuff should I add??

and if you can crit the song for me youd have ounces of my gratitude! pounds even!

song is in my profile "Highest Grade....."
#2
Post the lyrics here or it will be removed on the basis that it's an obvious "Look at my profile" thread
I will crit it when it's here.
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