#1
Some of my material

"As I wander these trails of thoughts
the sunless path I walk
Disheartening memories, grim voices, void of any hope"

(Black Metal vocals signifying evil thoughts)
"we welcome you to darkness
we are your anger, your hate, your despair
Once you are planted with our seed, your soul, we feed
It will control and consume you,
and darkness you shall be

(Insert some riffing)

Look at your heart
tattered and scarred
all cause you had hope
Come closer to us
Separate your heart from the world
and never feel again
#3
Are you shooting for a more melodic black metal feel, or just a vicious, haunting feel where the lyrics are more for emphasis than melody? If you want melody, insert some rhymes man. The feel and message is great, it's just that I generally rhyme lyrics. Then again, I'm no expert on black metal, so do what you feel works best for the song.
#4
"As I wander these trails of thoughts
the sunless path I walk
Disheartening memories, grim voices, void of any hope"

(Black Metal vocals signifying evil thoughts)
"we welcome you to darkness
we are your anger, your hate, your despair
Once you are planted with our seed, your soul, we feed
It will control and consume you,
and darkness you shall be

(Insert long tremolo picked riff)

Look at your heart
tattered and scarred
all cause you had hope
Come closer to us
Separate your heart from the world
and never feel again

(death metal Vocals as hope)
Hope did not cause you pain
It's a metamorphosis,a change within
Let the egg hatch as it gives you strength
The strength to never run, the courage to face the darkness head on
Ardens Affectus Vincere
Ride the phoenix
Only then will you understand the limitless of life

Solo

Clean baritone vocs interlude style
The choice is yours, to run or to charge
As for I, I will stand my ground
For I am one with the phoenix

Some riffage

Clean vocs like stu block
"The phoenix hope
can wing her way through the desert skies
and still defying fortune's spite
Revive from the ashes and (Falsetto scream/ air raid) RISEEEEE!!!!!!!

Quote from Miguel de Cernantes Completed