#1
Is it something that you said
Or something that I should do
Either way, the sign reads the same
Stay away
From me to you

I sit alone in paradise
There's no fish oil, no need for it too
Either way, the sign reads the same
Stay away
From me to you

The holy one deserves rest
At least one day out of every week
If the world stopped spinning...
Forgiveness won't be cheap

Is there anything you want to say
While the ocean is still blue
Either way, the sign reads the same
Stay away
From me to you
#2
In the first verse, the last line contradicts the rest of it.

Is it something that you said
Or something that I should do
Either way, the sign reads the same
Stay away
From me to you


From me to you means that you are saying it to the girl/boy. The rest of the stanza suggests that it is the other one who wants you to stay away. Please, correct me if I'm wrong, I'm very tired. I know now it's hard to find a rhyme, but I'm sure it will work out.

Besides that grammatical error, it's good.
Last edited by gateway01 at Jul 18, 2011,