#2
Pretty good, i liked the melancholic piano intro, it is very moving. You have some excellent ideas going on here and it has a LOT of potential. You said 'so far' so i'm assuming it's not done, but you should definately work on the structure as the changes don't really flow.

It was awesome up until the piano came back in after the guitar part. The guitar part comes in really well (maybe it could do with a little more build up) but then it just doesn't go anywhere. I was really expecting a full band with a heavy riff to enter which would have sounded awesome IMO. Then maybe bring in the piano again as an outro? Just a suggestion though, i just think it needs to be moulded more into a song rather than a string of ideas.

As for the production, sounds good and I like your guitar tone a lot. Nothing more to say here really, the production was more than adequate.

Anyway like i said, a hell of a lot of potential, it's pretty good so far but it could be really awesome when complete

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#3
I don't like the guitar tone, think it needs tightening up a bit. When it kicks in, I think the strings should still be playing and fade out after it's started it's riff. Other than that, I agree with 12Jim34. It has potential, and would sound awesome with a full band
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#4
Yeah strings should keep playing behind the guitar for a while I think, not long though. And I think for it to go into a full band would be sick. Loving the guitar tone as well
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#5
Great piano line and good piano tone as well, distorted strings or whatever in the background of the piano section is a little annoying. Strings could be brought up a little. Guitar part is good, decent sound but feels a little muddy, try layering the guitar for a fuller sound. transition in and out of guitar part is weird, doesnt flow.

Sounds really good, it has a lot of potential, just needs refining and some song structure work. I like it though, its a good start.

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#6
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Yeah strings should keep playing behind the guitar for a while I think, not long though. And I think for it to go into a full band would be sick. Loving the guitar tone as well


Thnx guys appreciate the kind words I it needs bass and drums!
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