#1
"November 14 No Doubt" - electric and with keyboards

"November 14 No Doubt" - NYE version

"November 14 No Doubt" - original version


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Music by Smelodies
Lyrics by Jeet

Steve on keyboards
Smelodies on guitar

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I don't know what the last song was about
But on November 14 no doubt
I will be watching two monsters with money clout
Touting this and shouting out
Two grown men battling it with gloves
Both will get love from women and their country
I will sure be drunk yelling at the screen
See I'm half Filipino, and I have a dilemma
I cheer for Pac-Man like he is me
Except that would be wrong, nuthuggery at best
I don't think Pac-Man will get the pellets
Cotto Salami will bubble up in that hot frying pan of battle
And the Puerto Ricans will smile
Either which way these two men will gain our respects
For they have fought like real men
May the weather change?
Either way these two men will gain our respects
For they have fought like real men
May the weather change?
Who knows, we like sunshine, not overcast shadows
#3
Like the above user said, get better recording equipment. From what I can make out, this sounds like a pretty standard pop tune, nothing too unique or different. Your vocals are very noticeably flat in many places, and the tone of your voice doesn't really fit the song. It's better suited for rock. It also sounds like you and your guitar need to spend some time with a metronome as well. In summary, practice more, and keep recording music.

I hope this helps.

c4c?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1461784
#4
Quote by AeolianInvasion
and the tone of your voice doesn't really fit the song. It's better suited for rock.


This confused me. My singing is horrible, that's a given. I sing out of necessity because lyrics that are sent to me inspire me to come up with songs.

I did have someone sing on this one: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OTWs9jUYLCM after I did https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1374455

But what do you mean "better suited for rock"?
#5
Quote by Smelodies
But what do you mean "better suited for rock"?


I'm talking about the timbre of your voice. It's low pitched and has a rough quality to it that lends itself more to rock. Kinda like how violins have a sound that is more often used for classical music while electric guitars have a sound that is more often used for heavy metal and rock. You voice sounds like a rock voice.