I Hate You

Hey singers, guitarists, and anyone else. Recently, I've been writing a song in my spare time. It's not near complete yet, but I'd like to show you what I have so far. I'd love for your opinions on it. Thanks.

How could I have fallen for this
Again I never put a single thought in it.
You say you love me, I say:
I hate you.

Verse 1:
I never thought that I would see the day;
The day you turned your back and you walked away.
I'm still in love, just not with you.

I always thought you'd be right by my side
And then I figured out you're just a lie.
Left in the dust, by someone else.

Well I'm tired of it.
I just don't think you're the one for me.
I'm gonna say this once for you:
I hate you.
Last edited by LYING PACKAGE at Jul 29, 2011,
it seems really thrown together, like you just tried doing this a few moments ago. I'm thinking you're gonna be writing this as a metalcore song or something along the lines of that?
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