#1
So this is my first full song that I've made in about 3-4 months so yeah. I'm not really sure how I feel about it, I experimented a bit with the drums at parts and at times the song seems like its just one big solo rather than a song but I'll let you guys decide.
The ending kind of sucks imo, I'll try to improve that. I also don't know if I'll ever add bass to this song either. Any suggestions/criticism will be greatly appreciated.

Critic for critic, listen to headphones w/RSE, etc.
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How Rad.gp5
How Rad.gp4
How Rad UPDATE.gp5
How Rad UPDATE.gp4
Last edited by Joshua1207 at Jul 30, 2011,
#4
Quote by Rossielle
wow.it was nice .i like the guitar lines . it seems a waltzish thing ,but i didn't like the drums. but it is just my opinion.anyway, greetings crit my song please


May I ask what part of the drums you didn't like or was it just all of the drumming in general?

I'll return the critic as soon as possible
#6
Well, I'm not really sure if the piece is done or not. Its kind of short and I may add more to it but I seemingly get too experimental the more my songs go on lol. I'm glad you finally liked one of my pieces though Herby :p

I'll be sure to check out some of your new stuff ASAP.
#7
Quote by Joshua1207
May I ask what part of the drums you didn't like or was it just all of the drumming in general?

I'll return the critic as soon as possible



well i didn't like the drums on the part from 13 -27 .it sounds too weird and superficial
#9
Quote by Joshua1207
Hmm, I can see why someone wouldn't enjoy that drum part. I was thinking of changing that part up a bit anyways. Thanks again.



it is not bad ,but i think you could do it better.anyway good work .i like much the guitars. it need some bass guitar
#10
Put an updated version in the OP. I added a bass and extended the song a little bit.
I'm indecisive on it. The bass kind of takes away from the atmosphere at times. I've never really been good at writing bass parts so yeah. It sounds a bit fuller, I suppose though.