#1
Hey, I just uploaded one of my songs and was wondoring if this is a sort of musical direction I could go well in. So please check it out, its not very long and give an honest review. And of cource I'll C4C

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ODw74d4VZ-w

When the world turns. Will you sink or swim?
When the time comes, no ones gonna win.
Too late. Its happening. Theres no going back.
Now watch. Around you. As the world turns to crap.

You see. The problem. The worlds just too corrupt.
The people. We trusted. Have lined their pockets up.
Poor old. Mother nature. Shes not got long left.
If we. Cant cure her. The world will turn to death.

Chorus
But somehow i know. We'll make it through. Not much choice. Were gonna have to.

cheers
#2
Hey man. Couple of points about the song:

1. The acoustic guitar sounds too bright. Try and make it warmer sounding, in my opinion.

2. The electric guitar sounds good during the verses but loses it during the chorus; too meek. The instrumental bit at the end sounds great with the reverby, psychedelic guitars playing off each other.

3. The drums do their job, but could be better with more interesting beats.

4. The lyrics, I have to say, are not to my liking at all. They sound unoriginal and cliche. The age-old sentiment of the world is going to pot thing has been said a million times, and the lyrics seem to be retreading old ground:

"Too late. Its happening. Theres no going back.
Now watch. Around you. As the world turns to crap".

"If we. Cant cure her. The world will turn to death".

Bad lines particularly, in my opinion.

Anyway, hope that was useful. C4C?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1465040