#1
Dancing on the clouds of a tangerine sky
So soft baby you could almost fall through
Into the depths of an uncharted ocean
But that ain’t stopping you

The limits of the journey are your imagination

My body moves in slow motion on a sail
Her shadow in the moonlight is busy casting spells
Our souls embark on a journey
I really wish them well, I really wish them well

Swimming through the tides of a desert landscape
The floating shreds of time as they’re passing too
Drowning in each moment but never forgotten
But that ain’t stopping you

The Limits of the journey are your imagination

My Body moves in slow motion on a sail
Her shadow in the moonlight is busy casting spells
Our souls embark on a journey
I really wish them well I really wish them well

Cast shadows as the body crawls under the sunlight
The distance of the goal an illusion of truth
The daunting shake of the view on horizon
But that ain’t stopping you

The Limits of the journey are your imagination

My Body moves in slow motion on a sail
Her shadow in the moonlight is busy casting spells
Our souls embark on a journey
I really wish them well I really wish them well
#2
Let me start off by saying that I really, really like the very vivid imagery you use throughout this piece. It truly makes the scenes you are describing come alive.

As there is so much to say on this piece, I will go through stanza by stanza with commentary.

Quote by RabidBeaver
Dancing on the clouds of a tangerine sky
So soft baby you could almost fall through
Into the depths of an uncharted ocean
But that ain’t stopping you

An excellent start. As with the rest, I love the imagry. However, there seems to be a slight flow issue with "Into the depths of an uncharted ocean, But that ain't stopping you." I would suggest changing it to "No, that ain't stopping you."

The limits of the journey are your imagination

Deep!

My body moves in slow motion on a sail
Her shadow in the moonlight is busy casting spells
Our souls embark on a journey
I really wish them well, I really wish them well

The phrase "Her body movies in slow motion on a sail" got me hooked. Wonderful chorus!

Swimming through the tides of a desert landscape
The floating shreds of time as they’re passing too
Drowning in each moment but never forgotten
But that ain’t stopping you

"Swimming through the tides of a desert landscape" is an amazing use of an oxymoron. Altogether impossible, but still it remains a beautiful thought.

The Limits of the journey are your imagination

My Body moves in slow motion on a sail
Her shadow in the moonlight is busy casting spells
Our souls embark on a journey
I really wish them well I really wish them well

Cast shadows as the body crawls under the sunlight
The distance of the goal an illusion of truth
The daunting shake of the view on horizon
But that ain’t stopping you

I really like the reference to the chorus section. It seems very natural; not at all forced.

The Limits of the journey are your imagination

My Body moves in slow motion on a sail
Her shadow in the moonlight is busy casting spells
Our souls embark on a journey
I really wish them well I really wish them well


All in all, this was quite a pleasure to read. Aside from that small flow issue, I really cannot think of any way you could possibly improve this piece. Excellent!
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#3
Hey, thanks for that! I really appreciate the comments on the imagery because when I was working on this piece one thing i really wanted was to paint this cool mental picture. I'm also glad you found that line deep because i was nervous it might come off as overly cheesy.