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The best advice I can give you is to not depend on the repeat signs for a sense of structure. It doesn't help. Short of coming back to a theme every now and then, anything you'll do will come off as just a riff salad. Riff salads can be good for starting a new piece, but they rarely work well as finished songs.

At riff 3, bar 56 is awfully out of place for the repeat.

The melodic hardcore bit was nice. Liked that, and it segued well into a powerful breakdown. Definitely keep that, but if you're going to repeat it so much, a fadeout would be appropriate.

Nothing outstandingly original, but other than some of the breakdowns, nothing painfully generic, either.

C4C? Not sure it'll be your thing, but you did put a melodic hardcore bit in there, so who knows?