#1
Hey all. It has been a while since I've been on UG. For a couple months now I have been writing songs that I would describe as "experimental indie" (kind of similar to Frog Eyes in a few ways). This is the first one that I have laid down.

http://soundcloud.com/my-great-ulysses-1/the-keeper-is-made-a-fool-demo

Please feel free to critique! It took some guts for me to post this because I am usually really self-conscious about my music/lyrics.

The quality isn't the best because I recorded it in my bedroom. Also, the recording might be loud - listen with caution! haha.

No guarantees, but I will try my best to listen to your work and critique yours if you critique mine.
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#2
I listened to this a few times.

The recording is good in its own way. However, the critic in me has to say that the parts sounds like they are a little out of sync (lead guitar sounded slightly out) I'll put that down to lo-fi recording/production. It is a bedroom recording after all.

I actually really like the guitar sound, was that down to the mixing? Nice little echo/reverb going on there. Couldn't make out the vocals completely (not that i have any problem with that), but otherwise, I like the vocals (good voice).

Edit - forgot to say, that in short, this is a good little track, and I enjoyed it.
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#3
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I listened to this a few times.

The recording is good in its own way. However, the critic in me has to say that the parts sounds like they are a little out of sync (lead guitar sounded slightly out) I'll put that down to lo-fi recording/production. It is a bedroom recording after all.

I actually really like the guitar sound, was that down to the mixing? Nice little echo/reverb going on there. Couldn't make out the vocals completely (not that i have any problem with that), but otherwise, I like the vocals (good voice).

Edit - forgot to say, that in short, this is a good little track, and I enjoyed it.


Ahh, thank you a lot! I do realize that it is a bit out of sync in some places. To be honest, the lead guitar was hard to do because they keyboard underneath it is playing in straight 12/8 time, but the guitar is playing sixteenth notes in 4/4. Theoretically it works - it's a hard match though. haha.

I did the guitar with my effects processor. No reverb, just a very tight delay with slight distortion. I prefer the sound that way, and I really don't do much with mixing when it comes to guitar. This is the first recording I did in which I double tracked the vocals, and I think that they turned out decent. Thanks for the compliments!

I hope to have a few more tracks done in the next weeks.

Anything you want me to critique of yours?
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#4
Really dig the rhythm guitar sound, reminds me of For the People by Dinosaur Jr, sweet.
The lead melody is a little too.. repetitive, it could use some variation to make the song feel more dynamic. The synth added a nice element to the tune aswell.

I get a bit of a John Frusciante feeling when I hear this, have you listened to this solo albums?

Overall, not bad at all, keep it up
#5
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Really dig the rhythm guitar sound, reminds me of For the People by Dinosaur Jr, sweet.
The lead melody is a little too.. repetitive, it could use some variation to make the song feel more dynamic. The synth added a nice element to the tune aswell.

I get a bit of a John Frusciante feeling when I hear this, have you listened to this solo albums?

Overall, not bad at all, keep it up


I agree. I think the lead guitar is what needs the most work. I have been toying around with changing it, and I think I eventually will.

I actually have not listened to his solo stuff, but I will give it a try!

Thanks for the critique!
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#6
Hi, it reminds me of The Doors, I don't know if they are an influence in your style...
I couldn't understand the lyrics.
I liked the tune in background that starts at around 01:05... its a really nice touch.
The bass = mission accomplished.
What I would suggest, is that you change the melody of the overall vocal tune... its a bit repetitive.

Please, have a look on my video, and if you will, leave a comment at it?
Thanks man!
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