#1
Well, i did this song about 10 mins ago, part put it up here, went for a shower and someone had closed it. Anyway, in the shower I thought of the chorus.
P.S this is for my band Cripples and Angels if you could crit it that would be awesome Its a rock song, with an acoustic intro bit.


Verse one: (what i can remeber of it anyway )

We can shoot bullet holes in the snow, just like we used to,
And act like no-one cares, even though we do,
It can never be the same,
But we can try, to make it alright again
Just like it was,




Chorus;

There you go, walking through the snow,
walking through the snow,
away from everybody,
everybody, everyone and me.
#2
I like this, the chorus especially. It seems like a good foundation to an acoustic song and the line "There you go, walking through the snow" gives a peaceful mental image so I think it goes well with an acoustic song. Keep working on it and try and get some more lyrics
#3
Thanks a lot. I have got a lot of songs stored up in my "book" I will be posting and writing new lyrics all the time but at the moment I've got lots of school work to do