ibanez2420
Registered User
Join date: Jun 2009
21 IQ
#1
Hey guys

This is the first song i've written and was wondering if anyone could help me out with it? I fell its pretty standard at the moment and needs some extra bits put in too improve it. I guess its kinda metalcore/hardcore? If anyone could help me out with some ideas it'd be much appreciated and I will c4c
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Your Mistake.gpx
Your Mistake.gp5
Saint78
julian wells
Join date: May 2009
1,760 IQ
#2
Pretty cool, it's generic, but as far as generic goes, it's good. I liked what you did with the open C for the first riff, I would really only change the bridge/breakdown part. When you hit the chords on the Low C and G, don't let them ring, if anything make them staccato, it sounds better. Then, the second part of the bridge, instead of the (lead I guess?) first guitar playing, maybe use some synths? Also, a solo might spice it up a bit.


Like this.
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Your Mistake - EDIT.gpx
you're a stone fox
Mitsos55
Registered User
Join date: Aug 2011
66 IQ
#3
I agree with the above comment. You might also want to repeat meters 19 to 25.
ibanez2420
Registered User
Join date: Jun 2009
21 IQ
#4
Thanks a lot guys, still learning how guitar pro works and stuff but yeah i'll change it a bit and try make it a little less generic