#1
just made this its not 100% doen but some advice or additions would be good (:

Those words run through your head like the jealousy in your veins
How does it feel? Living your life as a lie
Just lie there and pray you won’t wake
Trembling, shaking you know you’re a fake
Your life comes crashing down
Your walls are caving in
Your life comes crashing down
Your walls are caving in
You find yourself alone
Don’t clench your fists no god will save you now
fix the rope kick the chair
you have no hope, only despair
your thoughts wonder in and out
hold your breath its almost over
how does it feel living your life as a lie?
Last edited by asb9pwns at Aug 25, 2011,
#2
Read the rules. I've already sent you a warning so the next is a ban. In case you don't bother reading them, do not post 'C4C' in your title. We all know full-well you don't "critique".