#1
"Hall of Fame Speeches..."


I spent too much time scratching
my balls and then biting my nails.
I've cleaned up a lot, and since
I've lost all the dirt for
me to write about
I just decided
that I won't.

I'm over her.
Finally.
It's been fun.
OBEY THE MIGHTY SHITKICKER
#4
Quote by JustRooster
"Hall of Fame Speeches..."


I spent too much time scratching
my balls and then biting my nails.
I've cleaned up a lot, and since
I've lost all the dirt for
me to write about
I just decided
that I won't.

I'm over her.
Finally.
It's been fun.



Not gonna lie, at first I hated it and i quoted it to pick it apart and tell you everything I hated about it.

But then on the second read through it occurred to me that you did everything in your piece that you said you would. So bravo, first time through thought it was shit, second time through you caught me and I like it. I dont really have much more to add than that.
#5
I didn't care for this piece at first, but I couldn't pick out why. After another few reads, I don't hate it, but I do think this is more suited to a scribbling in a journal or something.

As a piece of poetry, it's pointless and uninteresting. As a personal note, a private proclamation of "I went through some shit, but now I'm over it", I'm sure it served it's purpose, but I personally don't think it has merit as an actual piece.