I like the idea you have here, and I think this song has some potential. I'll start with the most obvious: the drumming is completely off with the guitar strumming. I would re-record everything with a metronome, it would make the recording sound cleaner rhythm wise. Other than that I feel like your song is one big verse, I think if you added some variation in the melody when you play what you feel is the chorus or hook, because write now it sounds like the song is lacking some direction. I also think the lead guitar could use some guidance rhythmically to stick with the rhythm guitar (I like the licks!).

Good things: I like your lyrics and the overall feel the song has, very folky and it has potential. I liked it! Re-record it with a metronome and I'll definitely crit that as well!

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